Nate-Kar Sonichu: 2/5. Needs work, but keep trying.

2015-09-30T01:24:11Z

2/5. Needs work, but keep trying.

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== My take ==
Not much of this "alternate history" is very plausible. It relies way too much on Chris being willing to make self-improvement and Megan being [[SheCameForCWC.jpg|willing to forgive Chris]] strains my suspension of disbelief a bit. You seem to be [[A-Log|A-logging]] Barb pretty hard and basically ignoring Bob's co-equal hand in raising the boy the way he is. In terms of fanficiton, it's a fairly solid attempt at making the whole Chris-Chan saga come out more pleasantly.

Beyond that, there are lots of formatting issues you may want to look into relating to the size of your paragraphs, sentence structure, punctuation, capitalization, and that sort of thing. I think I saw this "article" a few months ago and added the links to appropriate pages for some of the references? I might have cleaned up some of the other more glaring things I spotted then too, but this still needs work. [[User:Nate-Kar Sonichu|Nathan]] ([[User talk:Nate-Kar Sonichu|talk]]) 01:23, 30 September 2015 (UTC)

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Nate-Kar Sonichu: 2/5. Needs work, but keep trying.